16 August 2007

Poetry Thursday 8/16

Bifocals
by Constance Brewer



A lens
in my eye
glass frame
is loose. Like
a shot-glass
window
in a derelict
house, it
........rattles
and
threatens
to.........fall.

24 comments:

Crafty Green Poet said...

This is excellent, I like it for its brevity and I can relate to it too. I've had glasses fall apart on me!

Brian said...

I love this. I get the sense of panic at being unable to see.

Carole said...

I've been there too. I love the simile and the dislocated form of the poem

paisley said...

that's why i keep plenty of spare pairs......

Anonymous said...

I'm not the only one getting old!
Ha!

Dave said...

Very nice.

gautami tripathy said...

That reminds me. I need to get glasses.

etain_lavena said...

soooo clever...hihih...really good:)

tumblewords said...

Those few words pulled me along, breathless, knowing something was changing.

Constance said...

crafty green poet - they don't fall apart as much as self destruct!

Constance said...

brian and carole, thanks!

Constance said...

paisley - as expensive as bi - now tri- focals are, not very easy to do. I refuse to do the medical tape thing either. :)

Constance said...

Anonymous brother - you'll ALWAYS be older than me. :)

Constance said...

dave, etain_lavena, tumblewords, thanks!

Constance said...

gautami tripathy - always glad to provide public service announcements. :)

K.M.Ryan said...

short and sweet. though i'm not sure how sweet it is to have your glasses falling apart. ^_^

Constance said...

K.M.Ryan - they're only threatening to fall apart.. hasn't happened. Yet. :)

my backyard said...

What a creative take on a mundane event!

Fledgling Poet said...

I love how the poem is literally "falling apart" along with the glasses...I really enjoyed this!

Constance said...

my backyard - Thanks!

fledgling poet- It seems like everything is falling apart of late. :)

Rob Kistner said...

I loved this little 'moment' -- well written, and great fun!

Constance said...

rob- thanks!

_Soulless_ said...

I've enjoyed this refreshing short poem along with others on your page, especially "Fractured" and "Zero Gravity."

Cheers.

Constance said...

soulless - thank you. I've been playing with shorter verse of late. Not many plces want epics!